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Wednesday, July 20th, 2011 02:38 pm
Somewhere, somewhere in the wide world, there must be a person with my name tattooed upon their heart. And that heart beats the triplicate rhythm of my name, a strange staccato, one-two-three one-two-three one-two-three.

The doctor in her white coat, once-upon-a-time, holding her stethoscope to a child’s narrow chest, frowning. “How do you feel?”

That child with shoulders faintly hunched, sitting on the bright impersonal vinyl of the doctor’s bench. Watching the doctor warily with eyes the color of my name. “Fine, I feel fine.”

That child, an adult now, walking this world, the song of my name murmuring through veins and arteries.

We look outwards for the solution to our problems, and it is neither right nor fair-- as if the world was in our debt, somehow, for presuming to exist around us. Such incredible arrogance to think that an unseen hand should have wrought the code of my self upon the person of another.

So, look inside for the answer. Split the skin, the breastbone, the ribs, the flesh, the latticework of blood, the pericardium, and swing the doors wide. Look at my naked heart and tell me what name is written there.

I know what you will find-- a lump of fibrous gristle, unmarked, beating the rhythm of no one’s name.
Wednesday, July 20th, 2011 06:04 pm (UTC)
Loved the message and the mood ♥ Lovely descriptions.
Wednesday, July 20th, 2011 11:30 pm (UTC)
I thank you. :-D I am embarrassingly thrilled and complimented to have received your comment, actually.

My mind comes out with strange stuff when I'm stressed, that's my best (only) explanation for this.
Thursday, July 21st, 2011 02:39 am (UTC)
Haha, it's actually really, really neat. I'm kind of jealous because it's short but self-contained, something which is very hard for me. It's sometimes hard to come up with something other than a story, which could span chapters and chapters, so it's nice to see a short, intense bit of meaningful and well-written piece of writing ♥

(and that's actually closer to what I wanted to say when I first read it, but you know how it is when you read something and have no idea how to phrase what you felt or thought about it XD)
Monday, August 1st, 2011 02:17 pm (UTC)
(All the time, rather...)

Heh. When I write stories-- ye gods, stories are an entirely different thing. I don't seem to get small ideas that can be covered in a paragraph, or three, or six, or a dozen. They're usually massive epics that I can't hope to do justice to. Especially since I write incredibly slowly. @_@

So possibly we're in the same boat, with the exception of the "doing justice" part. ;-)
Wednesday, July 20th, 2011 11:29 pm (UTC)
You have a wonderful way of using imagery.
Monday, August 1st, 2011 02:18 pm (UTC)
You have a wonderful way of being nice to me. :-) I appreciate your kindness, rather.
Thursday, July 21st, 2011 12:42 am (UTC)
Wow. This came out both smooth and intense, and I really liked it.
Thursday, July 21st, 2011 11:35 am (UTC)